scared mia

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  1. vgutmann says:

    Well done Mia, you have used commas well to mark subordinate clauses. You have also used some great descriptive words, I like ‘whispered’ and ‘glimpse’. Make sure you think about how the prompt fits in to your story. Also, when you are talking about more than one person you should use were, not was. E.g. Megan and I were walking…

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