Daniel, because I am from the United States, and I am not sure of the historical background, so I don’t think I can fully appreciate your poem. However, I like the way most of your lines rhyme and your strong word choice put a clear picture in my mind. It has an abrupt ending, but I cannot tell whether you meant to surprise or whether you reached your word limit and just finished. Remember to proofread and edit before you publish so you can catch those small, but important, corrections such as commas and apostrophes. Overall, very nice work!
Daniel, because I am from the United States, and I am not sure of the historical background, so I don’t think I can fully appreciate your poem. However, I like the way most of your lines rhyme and your strong word choice put a clear picture in my mind. It has an abrupt ending, but I cannot tell whether you meant to surprise or whether you reached your word limit and just finished. Remember to proofread and edit before you publish so you can catch those small, but important, corrections such as commas and apostrophes. Overall, very nice work!
Very good rhyming poem. Rethink the last two lines though I think you may have rushed them.