Well done Antoine, considering we had to rush typing this up at the end of the lesson, we did quite well. There is an error where the body trembles which needs sorting. and a sentence doesn’t quite make sense when it is read over. But overall a good effort made.
Mrs. Wheller
The content of your writing is very good and quite moving. The punctuation needs to be corrected for it to make sense. See if there is an adult in the classroom on Monday that can go through it with you.
Well done Antoine, considering we had to rush typing this up at the end of the lesson, we did quite well. There is an error where the body trembles which needs sorting. and a sentence doesn’t quite make sense when it is read over. But overall a good effort made.
Mrs. Wheller
The content of your writing is very good and quite moving. The punctuation needs to be corrected for it to make sense. See if there is an adult in the classroom on Monday that can go through it with you.