Some great description. Don’t forget to put information in brackets before the full stop. Also, always use capital letters for the names of things e.g. Whip and KFC.
Tarim and Vinnie
Thank you for sharing your story with us. I like the idea of the gangsta granny. Be carefully of using slang make sure you keep it appropriate.
You’ve been prompted about your capitals so remember that for next time.
Keep writing.
Its Tareeq
I like some of the extra detail you have included such golden glasses with diamond lenses. Well done for including brackets.
Excellent story well written keep on pumping out the good work
Well done tareeq and Vinnie good work
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Some great description. Don’t forget to put information in brackets before the full stop. Also, always use capital letters for the names of things e.g. Whip and KFC.
Tarim and Vinnie
Thank you for sharing your story with us. I like the idea of the gangsta granny. Be carefully of using slang make sure you keep it appropriate.
You’ve been prompted about your capitals so remember that for next time.
Keep writing.
Its Tareeq
I like some of the extra detail you have included such golden glasses with diamond lenses. Well done for including brackets.
Excellent story well written keep on pumping out the good work
Well done tareeq and Vinnie good work