Wow, what an exciting story. The first sentence is a fantastic complex sentence but you have forgetten the commas which make it make sense. E.g. It is the year 2050 and World War 3 has begun, many of my troops and bases have already fallen, this base, however, has a new type of weaponry that we call the plasma gun.
Wow, Chris, this is a very intense 100 word challenge! I really like that you used an onomatopoeia at the very end – it almost made me jump! Keep up the great writing.
Wow, what an exciting story. The first sentence is a fantastic complex sentence but you have forgetten the commas which make it make sense. E.g. It is the year 2050 and World War 3 has begun, many of my troops and bases have already fallen, this base, however, has a new type of weaponry that we call the plasma gun.
Wow, Chris, this is a very intense 100 word challenge! I really like that you used an onomatopoeia at the very end – it almost made me jump! Keep up the great writing.
thank you ever so much