Hi Callum,
Thank you for entry into the 100WC this week. I enjoyed reading your writing because it had some interesting vocabulary. I really liked the repetition of ‘normal’ in the first sentence. It made me think that it was going to be quite unusual. Your description of everything within the story really helped me to imagine what what happening.
It was quite difficult to read the font you had chosen, so next time a different font might be helpful. Also you haven’t used the prompt … it came down the drainpipe… anywhere in your story, which was really the whole point! Next time, if you could include the prompt, that would be great. Keep trying hard though.
Hi Callum,
Thank you for entry into the 100WC this week. I enjoyed reading your writing because it had some interesting vocabulary. I really liked the repetition of ‘normal’ in the first sentence. It made me think that it was going to be quite unusual. Your description of everything within the story really helped me to imagine what what happening.
It was quite difficult to read the font you had chosen, so next time a different font might be helpful. Also you haven’t used the prompt … it came down the drainpipe… anywhere in your story, which was really the whole point! Next time, if you could include the prompt, that would be great. Keep trying hard though.
Mrs McG (Team 100WC)
Derbyshire, England
That Man Is Beast!!!
He totally annihilated the mother ship!
Nice writing