Hi Monika,
Thank you for your entry into the 100WC this week. I enjoyed reading your story as you have included some interesting description and the ideas you have about the ‘master’. Your sentence including the prompt, about the spider, was great. I wonder who tapped Max on the shoulder and what is going to happen next.
Looking at the part that you have used inverted commas for, I think you could have punctuated both of those questions with questions marks. That would have made this even better than it already is. Keep thinking about your writing. You’ve done a great job here.
Hi Monika,
Thank you for your entry into the 100WC this week. I enjoyed reading your story as you have included some interesting description and the ideas you have about the ‘master’. Your sentence including the prompt, about the spider, was great. I wonder who tapped Max on the shoulder and what is going to happen next.
Looking at the part that you have used inverted commas for, I think you could have punctuated both of those questions with questions marks. That would have made this even better than it already is. Keep thinking about your writing. You’ve done a great job here.
Mrs McG (Team 100WC)
Derbyshire, England