A very exciting story Megan and Mia, the use of ‘suddenly’ and ‘in a flash’ really adds to the sense of panic the girls must be feeling. I like your use of speech which is almost correctly punctuated. Don’t forget the comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark at the end. E.g. “We’re sinking!” Mia shouted to Megan. Please choose a different font as this one makes it difficult to see whether you have used capital letters correctly.
A very exciting story Megan and Mia, the use of ‘suddenly’ and ‘in a flash’ really adds to the sense of panic the girls must be feeling. I like your use of speech which is almost correctly punctuated. Don’t forget the comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark at the end. E.g. “We’re sinking!” Mia shouted to Megan. Please choose a different font as this one makes it difficult to see whether you have used capital letters correctly.
ok thx