What a funny story, good use of the ellipsis. The last sentence is very long, please break it into several smaller ones. E.g. One day, when I ran away from my house, I was so tired that I decided to take a rest. So I sat on the sofa…
Hi Harvey – what a great story! Very funny! I wonder which character you became? Not sure which one I’d like to be – maybe you don’t get a choice! Next time, have a final check of your punctuation and spelling before submitting your work, as there may be some mistakes you could correct for yourself. Keep on writing, Harvey!
What a funny story, good use of the ellipsis. The last sentence is very long, please break it into several smaller ones. E.g. One day, when I ran away from my house, I was so tired that I decided to take a rest. So I sat on the sofa…
Hi Harvey – what a great story! Very funny! I wonder which character you became? Not sure which one I’d like to be – maybe you don’t get a choice! Next time, have a final check of your punctuation and spelling before submitting your work, as there may be some mistakes you could correct for yourself. Keep on writing, Harvey!