A very unusual story Megan, you have up-levelled your work by using some great vocabulary, especially ‘outraged’ and ‘stroll’. You have also punctuated your speech very well. The use of the colon is wrong though, it should read
…our names are Ham and Cheese. This is our son, Pate,” the family replied…
Overall, very well done!
I tried and I thought it was wrong but I also thought it was right so I went with the one that I could think would be better so sorry about that and thank you for my comment
A very unusual story Megan, you have up-levelled your work by using some great vocabulary, especially ‘outraged’ and ‘stroll’. You have also punctuated your speech very well. The use of the colon is wrong though, it should read
…our names are Ham and Cheese. This is our son, Pate,” the family replied…
Overall, very well done!
I tried and I thought it was wrong but I also thought it was right so I went with the one that I could think would be better so sorry about that and thank you for my comment
A very good but unusual story Megan you have used some great vocabulary. manly outraged and stroll
from heather and holly.