What a scary story to arise from an everyday event like playing with a cousin Chelsea. You chose some super WOW words to convey the sense of drama, like ‘gloomy’ and ‘menacingly.’ I also liked the way you reinforced that by referring to ‘a flicker of light’ rather than just ‘under a streetlamp’ for example. But what happened next?! I’d like to challenge you to think of a twist in the tale, where the menacing individual turns out to be someone completely different – who could it be?
Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.
Great descriptive words, I especially like ‘gloomy’, ‘pitch black’ and ‘menacingly’. Read through again and correct your punctuation. There are a lot of capital letters missing!
What a scary story to arise from an everyday event like playing with a cousin Chelsea. You chose some super WOW words to convey the sense of drama, like ‘gloomy’ and ‘menacingly.’ I also liked the way you reinforced that by referring to ‘a flicker of light’ rather than just ‘under a streetlamp’ for example. But what happened next?! I’d like to challenge you to think of a twist in the tale, where the menacing individual turns out to be someone completely different – who could it be?
Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.
Great descriptive words, I especially like ‘gloomy’, ‘pitch black’ and ‘menacingly’. Read through again and correct your punctuation. There are a lot of capital letters missing!