Very good vocabulary, I like the fact that he has a soft voice. Good use of speech marks as well. Make sure you start each new person speaking on a new line with a capital letter and include punctuation at the end. E.g.
“I want to see the animals,” replied the boy…
Very good vocabulary, I like the fact that he has a soft voice. Good use of speech marks as well. Make sure you start each new person speaking on a new line with a capital letter and include punctuation at the end. E.g.
“I want to see the animals,” replied the boy…