I like your description of the marvellous machine. Please use capital letters at the beginning of your sentences and next week your challenge is to write a story that is not about the Romans!
Daniel,
You obviously like the Romans! Good effort on your 100 work challenge, however, next week try and make it 100 words. You also need to take the time to edit your work. Capital letters are missing and you have not been consistent with the tense. Good luck with next weeks challenge.
Mrs Petersen (Team 100WC) Australia
There is lots of drama in this story! I can tell that you were excited about writing this. Be sure to proofread your work when you are done so you can pick up on the small spelling and punctuation mistakes.
I like your description of the marvellous machine. Please use capital letters at the beginning of your sentences and next week your challenge is to write a story that is not about the Romans!
I will do it on Greeks
Daniel,
You obviously like the Romans! Good effort on your 100 work challenge, however, next week try and make it 100 words. You also need to take the time to edit your work. Capital letters are missing and you have not been consistent with the tense. Good luck with next weeks challenge.
Mrs Petersen (Team 100WC) Australia
There is lots of drama in this story! I can tell that you were excited about writing this. Be sure to proofread your work when you are done so you can pick up on the small spelling and punctuation mistakes.