Wow, what a gruesome story, Antoine. You have created some very powerful images with your word choices and I like the way you described the chair and your use of a simile to describe the entry of the minions. I can see you have found it hard to keep to 100 words – this is where you have to go back and edit your work really carefully. Keep up the good work and keep entering the 100 word challenge.
Excellent language and vivid descriptions. Well done Antoine. Use capital letters for Lord as it is part of his name. When we look at this on Monday I will go through with you to correct a couple of minor errors.
Wow, what a gruesome story, Antoine. You have created some very powerful images with your word choices and I like the way you described the chair and your use of a simile to describe the entry of the minions. I can see you have found it hard to keep to 100 words – this is where you have to go back and edit your work really carefully. Keep up the good work and keep entering the 100 word challenge.
Excellent language and vivid descriptions. Well done Antoine. Use capital letters for Lord as it is part of his name. When we look at this on Monday I will go through with you to correct a couple of minor errors.