Hi Ruby, without doubt, this is my favourite story this week. I think you did a brilliant job with the picture prompt and your piece was just filled with beautiful imagery and vocabulary. In fact, I think I want to go to this special place. Then I like how you changed the tone with the ‘icy hand’ and described the kidnapping of the statues. Very well done. I’m going to recommend this piece for Showcase. Good luck!
Hi Ruby, without doubt, this is my favourite story this week. I think you did a brilliant job with the picture prompt and your piece was just filled with beautiful imagery and vocabulary. In fact, I think I want to go to this special place. Then I like how you changed the tone with the ‘icy hand’ and described the kidnapping of the statues. Very well done. I’m going to recommend this piece for Showcase. Good luck!
i like that you added a lot of detail but the thing you did wrong was that you wrote where 2 times at the start of the 4th sentence.