Excellent short story! Really enjoyed reading it. You’ve created a great sense of adventure and urgency with your ‘Whoosh!’. There’s a feeling of danger and fear. I like the way you used the phrase ‘shot out of their houses like bullets’. Great work..I wonder what happened next??
That was a really great story! I loved how you used similes to describe the scene and how you used onomatopoeia. Keep writing; you have a great talent for it.
Excellent short story! Really enjoyed reading it. You’ve created a great sense of adventure and urgency with your ‘Whoosh!’. There’s a feeling of danger and fear. I like the way you used the phrase ‘shot out of their houses like bullets’. Great work..I wonder what happened next??
A Kealy
St Rose’s NS
Team 100wc
That was a really great story! I loved how you used similes to describe the scene and how you used onomatopoeia. Keep writing; you have a great talent for it.
Becca
5th grade student in the USA