Good start Chase, especially as you didn’t have much time. Make sure you check that your commas and full stops are in the right place. E.g. The plan was clear, all they had to do was break in and steal the money, but they failed.
It was a very good start. I’d like to hear more about the bank heist and why it failed. Also, please ask your teacher if Rabbit and Fish need capital letters.
Good start Chase, especially as you didn’t have much time. Make sure you check that your commas and full stops are in the right place. E.g. The plan was clear, all they had to do was break in and steal the money, but they failed.
It was a very good start. I’d like to hear more about the bank heist and why it failed. Also, please ask your teacher if Rabbit and Fish need capital letters.
Also me Vinnie in oak yr6.