The Big Swimming Party

Posted on November 3, 2017 by Deleted User
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5 Responses to The Big Swimming Party

  1. Mya says:
    November 3, 2017 at 11:22 am

    Very good story. Next time write, Mr. White’s friends came to his party instead of Mr. White friend had come to his party.
    Well done.

  2. Delaney says:
    November 3, 2017 at 2:02 pm

    I like how you included lots of details. Next time maybe use more adjectives, but you did a great job otherwise.

  3. Tyler says:
    November 4, 2017 at 2:04 pm

    Good job! I really enjoyed imagining how fun that would be.
    Keep it up,
    Tyler

  4. Tyler says:
    November 4, 2017 at 2:05 pm

    Good job! I really enjoyed imagining how fun that would be.
    Keep up the good work,
    Tyler

  5. devir1 says:
    November 4, 2017 at 2:14 pm

    I like you how you used one of the FANBOYS

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