Well done, an excellent entry this week. Good punctuation and description. Next time make sure you put others before yourself (My bestie Trinity and I). Also use a new line when you use speech. The enter/return key will start a new line for you.
Well done: this is an enjoyable piece of writing! I was very impressed that you managed to stay polite even after the surprise of ending up in a magical land. You’ve used lots of very good punctuation, which is also excellent. I wonder what your next adventure with Trinity will be?
Well done, an excellent entry this week. Good punctuation and description. Next time make sure you put others before yourself (My bestie Trinity and I). Also use a new line when you use speech. The enter/return key will start a new line for you.
Mr Haylock
Becky –
Well done: this is an enjoyable piece of writing! I was very impressed that you managed to stay polite even after the surprise of ending up in a magical land. You’ve used lots of very good punctuation, which is also excellent. I wonder what your next adventure with Trinity will be?
-MikeB (team 100wc – Essex, UK).