Well done Felicity. Excellent punctuation of your 5 sentences about the jungle. I really like the adjectives you have used, especially ‘slivery’. Next time you could tell me what the black monkey was doing by including a verb and possibly an adverb.
E.g. I can see a black monkey swinging quickly in the tall green trees.
I’ve been in a jungle and it is certainly noisy. Your writing describes how it is busy, with many animals. Next time think about all your senses; what might you feel whilst watching that ‘cheeky’ monkey?
Well done Felicity. Excellent punctuation of your 5 sentences about the jungle. I really like the adjectives you have used, especially ‘slivery’. Next time you could tell me what the black monkey was doing by including a verb and possibly an adverb.
E.g. I can see a black monkey swinging quickly in the tall green trees.
Well done Felicity. I enjoy seeing your work on the computer. Keep up the good work. Daddy.
I’ve been in a jungle and it is certainly noisy. Your writing describes how it is busy, with many animals. Next time think about all your senses; what might you feel whilst watching that ‘cheeky’ monkey?
Hello Felicity,
I enjoyed reading your 5 sentence challenge, I liked your flamingo sentence.
Just a little tip to double check your spelling, e.g. ‘roaring’.
Well done,
Mrs W
Team 5 SC