I like your use of the word ‘finally’ but only use it once. Ask Mrs Wheller to help you with your commas on Monday and add some description about how he is feeling.
Your idea is amazing! I think the story should be told in the first person, or from the man’s point of view. That would make a much easier transition when you talk about looking out the window. I like the idea of a person following his or her dream 🙂 Feel free to visit my students’ blogs: http://kidblog.org/GarnersGroovyGalsandGuys/
I like your use of the word ‘finally’ but only use it once. Ask Mrs Wheller to help you with your commas on Monday and add some description about how he is feeling.
Your idea is amazing! I think the story should be told in the first person, or from the man’s point of view. That would make a much easier transition when you talk about looking out the window. I like the idea of a person following his or her dream 🙂 Feel free to visit my students’ blogs: http://kidblog.org/GarnersGroovyGalsandGuys/