What an interesting start Arnas, I cannot wait for the next instalment! Remember capital letters at the start of your sentences. I also think it would add to the anticipation if you used short sentences at the beginning. E.g. It started in 2050. It started because…
Thank you for entering 100WC this week. You have produced a good short story and I wonder what might happen next?
Next time try to remember your capital letters at the beginning of your sentences.
Well done and keep writing 🙂
What an interesting start Arnas, I cannot wait for the next instalment! Remember capital letters at the start of your sentences. I also think it would add to the anticipation if you used short sentences at the beginning. E.g. It started in 2050. It started because…
Thank you for entering 100WC this week. You have produced a good short story and I wonder what might happen next?
Next time try to remember your capital letters at the beginning of your sentences.
Well done and keep writing 🙂
well done Arnas it is very good next time remember your capital letters
from holly in year 6