What a moving piece of writing, have you shown your Mum? Some great description and I love your drop in clause. Don’t use more than one ellipsis, the second one makes more sense.
I would have put a full stop after Forever Living and capital letters after comas are unusual. However, this is a lovely piece of writing and you, your mum and your teacher must be very proud. I am a grandma, and would be thrilled to be described as a “spark”
Well done Rebecca, a great piece of writing about your mum. An extra well done for being selected in the showcase as well – a fantastic achievement. I particularly liked your use of metaphor at the end – an added spark to your piece!
Thank you so much for your lovely replies everyone I really hope that you all enjoy listening to my stories, I am very proud of myself and im sure my teachers are too!♥
What a moving piece of writing, have you shown your Mum? Some great description and I love your drop in clause. Don’t use more than one ellipsis, the second one makes more sense.
I would have put a full stop after Forever Living and capital letters after comas are unusual. However, this is a lovely piece of writing and you, your mum and your teacher must be very proud. I am a grandma, and would be thrilled to be described as a “spark”
Well written congratulations on getting onto the showcase
A well written piece of writing. I love the descriptions you have used. The ending finishes this really well.
Well done Rebecca, a great piece of writing about your mum. An extra well done for being selected in the showcase as well – a fantastic achievement. I particularly liked your use of metaphor at the end – an added spark to your piece!
Thank you so much for your lovely replies everyone I really hope that you all enjoy listening to my stories, I am very proud of myself and im sure my teachers are too!♥
thanks♥