I like the ideas in this story and the way you are writing in character. However, there is almost no punctuation, especially speech punctuation, full stops and capital letters. Please go back and correct the punctuation.
I really enjoyed your 100WC! It was definitely not boring! The main thing that stood out for me was the playful way in which you used rhyming words, which made the whole piece of writing come across as really fun and lighthearted – a bit like the monkeys you were writing about. Wonderful. I hope that you continue to do fun writing, and next time you could just check it over to make sure the punctuation and layout makes it easier for the reader to understand. Well done.
I like the ideas in this story and the way you are writing in character. However, there is almost no punctuation, especially speech punctuation, full stops and capital letters. Please go back and correct the punctuation.
Hi there,
I really enjoyed your 100WC! It was definitely not boring! The main thing that stood out for me was the playful way in which you used rhyming words, which made the whole piece of writing come across as really fun and lighthearted – a bit like the monkeys you were writing about. Wonderful. I hope that you continue to do fun writing, and next time you could just check it over to make sure the punctuation and layout makes it easier for the reader to understand. Well done.