This story has some good ideas but doesn’t quite make sense in places. Please read through and correct any sentences that don’t make sense and then finish the story off.
I think you started really well. You included your setting and main character and you made the reader feel slightly scared with your image of the large cave. However, I think that your story needed more work to finish.
Remember to check that your story makes sense right to the end and that your story has the correct tense throughout.
Keep on writing.
This story has some good ideas but doesn’t quite make sense in places. Please read through and correct any sentences that don’t make sense and then finish the story off.
I think you started really well. You included your setting and main character and you made the reader feel slightly scared with your image of the large cave. However, I think that your story needed more work to finish.
Remember to check that your story makes sense right to the end and that your story has the correct tense throughout.
Keep on writing.