Well done Megan, I really like the opening of this story, your complex sentence is well punctuated and your use of onomatopoeia adds to the excitement of the story. The speech punctuation has gone slightly wrong at the end. Have a look at it and see if you can correct it.
Hi Megan
What a pleasant surprise! I loved reading your 100 word challenge and really enjoyed the Christmas theme especially as any of the other challenges I’ve been reading didn’t mention Christmas so this was a lovely surprise. You have created a great sense of anticipation with your fast paced description of events as they unfolded and you have used the prompt very cleverly to create a mysterious atmosphere. Well done and keep up the good work.
Ms O’Keeffe (team 100wc)
Ireland
Well done Megan, I really like the opening of this story, your complex sentence is well punctuated and your use of onomatopoeia adds to the excitement of the story. The speech punctuation has gone slightly wrong at the end. Have a look at it and see if you can correct it.
Hi Megan
What a pleasant surprise! I loved reading your 100 word challenge and really enjoyed the Christmas theme especially as any of the other challenges I’ve been reading didn’t mention Christmas so this was a lovely surprise. You have created a great sense of anticipation with your fast paced description of events as they unfolded and you have used the prompt very cleverly to create a mysterious atmosphere. Well done and keep up the good work.
Ms O’Keeffe (team 100wc)
Ireland