Hi Austin,
I spotted your writing because there is a student in my class called Notch!! You have used some excellent adjectives in your writing. I especially like how Notch walked “swiftly” to the entrance and “zoomed” to the interview room.
One suggestion, leaving a space after a comma, like so, makes your writing clearer to read.
Keep up the great writing.
Mrs Horan (Team 100wc) Morrinsville, New Zealand
Excellent Austin, a well written 100WC. Ensure all your writing is in the past tense.
got in his car ,which is a ford fiesta,
got in his car ,which was a ford fiesta,
Hi Austin,
I spotted your writing because there is a student in my class called Notch!! You have used some excellent adjectives in your writing. I especially like how Notch walked “swiftly” to the entrance and “zoomed” to the interview room.
One suggestion, leaving a space after a comma, like so, makes your writing clearer to read.
Keep up the great writing.
Mrs Horan (Team 100wc) Morrinsville, New Zealand