Great story Deborah! I loved how you told the story through a diary entry so you could really explain how you felt during this spectacle in the woods, and your story had a great plot line and really good description and grammar-I liked how you included a semi-colon at the beginning and the three dots to build suspense. Your use of onomatopoeia when you said “CRUNCHH!” was also very impressive as it made me feel as if I was there with you in the woods hearing these noises. Very well done!
Great story Deborah! I loved how you told the story through a diary entry so you could really explain how you felt during this spectacle in the woods, and your story had a great plot line and really good description and grammar-I liked how you included a semi-colon at the beginning and the three dots to build suspense. Your use of onomatopoeia when you said “CRUNCHH!” was also very impressive as it made me feel as if I was there with you in the woods hearing these noises. Very well done!