Hi Lillie
Loved the simile – was as angry as a hungry shark. You would benefit from reading over your work again and seeing if you could have added some verbs such as was. There wasn’t many adjectives used today and I would have like to have seen a couple more at least, such as huge, furry, deep ,dark etc.
Mrs. Wheller
Hi Lillie
Loved the simile – was as angry as a hungry shark. You would benefit from reading over your work again and seeing if you could have added some verbs such as was. There wasn’t many adjectives used today and I would have like to have seen a couple more at least, such as huge, furry, deep ,dark etc.
Mrs. Wheller