I loved your use of adjectives here – you created a very vivid picture in my mind. I wondered if you’d read this back to yourself? If so, did you spot places where a full stop might perhaps have been helpful? It’s an engaging story, and I liked the way it ended on a cliffhanger.
Grat work tigsi!
I loved your use of adjectives here – you created a very vivid picture in my mind. I wondered if you’d read this back to yourself? If so, did you spot places where a full stop might perhaps have been helpful? It’s an engaging story, and I liked the way it ended on a cliffhanger.