Hi Philip, I absolutely love your piece of writing. Your adjectives are excellent and I can really visualise the setting. You’ve set the scene very well and I can almost ‘feel’ the whole atmosphere of the festival. Brilliant. There’s just one tiny error and that’s where you forgot the ‘h’ in where, but I’m sure it’s just an oversight. Next time, just make sure you read back over your piece before you submit it. I’m going to recommend this piece for showcase. Very best of luck to you.
Hi Philip, I absolutely love your piece of writing. Your adjectives are excellent and I can really visualise the setting. You’ve set the scene very well and I can almost ‘feel’ the whole atmosphere of the festival. Brilliant. There’s just one tiny error and that’s where you forgot the ‘h’ in where, but I’m sure it’s just an oversight. Next time, just make sure you read back over your piece before you submit it. I’m going to recommend this piece for showcase. Very best of luck to you.