I loved your use of ellipses at the end of the report. A very unique and intriguing idea, but will you consider using commas in you compound and complex sentences between the coordinating conjunctions and the clauses, for example,
Last week, at rainbow activity center a girl called Iris was seen falling in a pond, but a few minutes later she came back up to the surface and just disappeared.
And to add more periods as to eliminate run on sentences.
I loved your use of ellipses at the end of the report. A very unique and intriguing idea, but will you consider using commas in you compound and complex sentences between the coordinating conjunctions and the clauses, for example,
Last week, at rainbow activity center a girl called Iris was seen falling in a pond, but a few minutes later she came back up to the surface and just disappeared.
And to add more periods as to eliminate run on sentences.