Well done! You really built up a picture in my mind of what Albert is like. Good use of adjectives. Some people call me Mickey too so I was pleased to see a Mickey in your story. Just be careful of the spelling of clothes.
That is a good story and good use of adjectives. Good use of puctuation and be careful of the spelling of clothes.Hope you get loads of comments and I liked it when you used Mickey as well but you need a capial letter at the first letter of Mickey.
great story I like the bit when he went to the market to buy rat poisoning
Hi Callum,
Well done! You really built up a picture in my mind of what Albert is like. Good use of adjectives. Some people call me Mickey too so I was pleased to see a Mickey in your story. Just be careful of the spelling of clothes.
Michael (Team 100wc), Warwick, UK.
That is a good story and good use of adjectives. Good use of puctuation and be careful of the spelling of clothes.Hope you get loads of comments and I liked it when you used Mickey as well but you need a capial letter at the first letter of Mickey.
From Joanne
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