Rayan – this is so exciting! A ‘hypnotising death ray’ made me stop and have a bit of a think. Whatever will happen to the world and everyone in it? Have you considered writing a novel? Work hard on your vocabulary and grammar and you might have a best seller in the bookstore one day.
I like the use of Interconentional missile it put the adventure right into the story .
I like the use of the countdown to fire the missile.
Rayan – this is so exciting! A ‘hypnotising death ray’ made me stop and have a bit of a think. Whatever will happen to the world and everyone in it? Have you considered writing a novel? Work hard on your vocabulary and grammar and you might have a best seller in the bookstore one day.
It has nice descibtion.