Hi Jake and welcome to 100wc,
I like the setting you have created, by giving the reader the names of people and places it makes the story sound more believable. The way you ended your writing with ‘for now’ gives the hint that something more is to come.
Don’t forget that you have 100 words to use here, next time aim to get a little bit closer to that number. It will mean that you will need to choose your words carefully and think particularly about your ending but will give you the chance to tell your reader more.
I look forward to reading more of your posts in the coming weeks.
Miss T
Team 100wc
Hi Jake and welcome to 100wc,
I like the setting you have created, by giving the reader the names of people and places it makes the story sound more believable. The way you ended your writing with ‘for now’ gives the hint that something more is to come.
Don’t forget that you have 100 words to use here, next time aim to get a little bit closer to that number. It will mean that you will need to choose your words carefully and think particularly about your ending but will give you the chance to tell your reader more.
I look forward to reading more of your posts in the coming weeks.
Miss T
Team 100wc