the over side

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3 Responses to the over side

  1. layla says:

    Good job I can imagine the images in the little u could write I like it and good job!

  2. phaylock says:

    Well done Ruby, a great use of the prompt which your writing built up to. It certainly makes me want to read on and find out if there is actually anything there. Just a spelling tip for next time:

    otherside

    we go over the hill

  3. Mr P says:

    Hi Ruby,

    you have written an inventive response to the prompt. You have done well to build tension with your descriptions e.g., ‘a faint noise..’ and I think you girls were really brave to carry on walking towards the river – leaving the reader wanting to know what happens next.

    Well done.

    MrP.
    Team 100WC
    Bury, UK

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