What a shame you didn’t finish this you’ve made such a great start. I love your vocabulary choices, especially, ‘despite’ and ,’on the other hand.’ Dan and Lora should have a comma at either end as you have ‘dropped in’, extra information. ‘However,’ should be the start of a new sentence. Well done!
What a shame you didn’t finish this you’ve made such a great start. I love your vocabulary choices, especially, ‘despite’ and ,’on the other hand.’ Dan and Lora should have a comma at either end as you have ‘dropped in’, extra information. ‘However,’ should be the start of a new sentence. Well done!