Could you rewrite this without using any speech? I would rather you use your 100 words to include more description and interesting adjectives and adverbs. The name Medusa does not require speech marks.
That is a scary story Mia, especially the ending. I would be terrified if I knew that that had happened near me! It would have been a good idea to add more description to help your reader picture the scene you were using for your story. Maybe next time, you could describe the setting.
Nicola Richardson, Team 100wc, Tyne and Wear, Uk
Could you rewrite this without using any speech? I would rather you use your 100 words to include more description and interesting adjectives and adverbs. The name Medusa does not require speech marks.
That is a scary story Mia, especially the ending. I would be terrified if I knew that that had happened near me! It would have been a good idea to add more description to help your reader picture the scene you were using for your story. Maybe next time, you could describe the setting.
Nicola Richardson, Team 100wc, Tyne and Wear, Uk
Ok