This story starts off well Daniel. I like your use of short sentences to build interest. When using speech for conversation start each new person speaking on a new line and make sure you have a capital letter at the beginning of the sentence when somebody is speaking.
This story starts off well Daniel. I like your use of short sentences to build interest. When using speech for conversation start each new person speaking on a new line and make sure you have a capital letter at the beginning of the sentence when somebody is speaking.