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  1. vgutmann says:

    You’ve made a good start Danny. I really like your choice of language, especially, ‘what became of him…’
    Remember to punctuate your work and separate the ideas into sentences. E.g. ‘…left at sea. Sam is always…’

  2. Jordan Team100WC says:

    Hi Danny, great start! I like the suspense you build in such a short piece – excellent!

    This could be made even better by checking back over your work for punctuation errors, keep it up

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