I know you didn’t have much time, which is a shame as this story is promising. Add some more information on Monday and correct your punctuation. E.g. He was shocked to find a tiny little meerkat called Vinnie. “Hi,” it said in it’s squeaky little voice. The Dark Lord was surprised (he had never seen a meerkat before) and, unlike you or me, he was not pleased to see it.
I know you didn’t have much time, which is a shame as this story is promising. Add some more information on Monday and correct your punctuation. E.g. He was shocked to find a tiny little meerkat called Vinnie. “Hi,” it said in it’s squeaky little voice. The Dark Lord was surprised (he had never seen a meerkat before) and, unlike you or me, he was not pleased to see it.