This is great! It kind of reminds me of The Girl Who Drank the Moon, with the “city of sorrows” theme. Good job, I hope to see a Part Two in a few weeks!
Change the e to he. Leave a space between awoken and by. Leave of between the all and the. Change the to to into. Capitalize the D in Devils and the F in Forest
You should change the e to he, and put an ‘ at the word devils.
Good job. Did you get the name Voldomalty from Voldemort? Keep up the good work.
I think it was just an amazing story and good details
This is great! It kind of reminds me of The Girl Who Drank the Moon, with the “city of sorrows” theme. Good job, I hope to see a Part Two in a few weeks!
Very Nice! I love the story idea but what is the “e” in the second line?
Change the e to he. Leave a space between awoken and by. Leave of between the all and the. Change the to to into. Capitalize the D in Devils and the F in Forest