Well done on your story this week Mel. Your opening sentences are very powerful and grab the readers attention straight away. Don’t forget to carefully read over your story, as in the second part the meaning is a bit lost. You are missing some words and the sentences run into each other. Reading your story out loud can help to make sure it all makes sense for your reader.
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w/c
Dublin
Ireland
Well done on your story this week Mel. Your opening sentences are very powerful and grab the readers attention straight away. Don’t forget to carefully read over your story, as in the second part the meaning is a bit lost. You are missing some words and the sentences run into each other. Reading your story out loud can help to make sure it all makes sense for your reader.
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w/c
Dublin
Ireland