What an adventure! Falsely imprisoned parents, children left to fend for themselves and a destiny to be fulfilled has the making of a great adventure story. Well done.
It’s obvious you are developing good writing skills and have creative ideas. You also know the power speech can have for readers trying to better understand the thoughts of characters. Again, well done.
My only suggestion might be to take a little care with punctuation. There were some small errors you missed when editing.
Keep writing and entering the 100WC. Good writers should share their adventures.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Hello soyod,
What an adventure! Falsely imprisoned parents, children left to fend for themselves and a destiny to be fulfilled has the making of a great adventure story. Well done.
It’s obvious you are developing good writing skills and have creative ideas. You also know the power speech can have for readers trying to better understand the thoughts of characters. Again, well done.
My only suggestion might be to take a little care with punctuation. There were some small errors you missed when editing.
Keep writing and entering the 100WC. Good writers should share their adventures.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia