Excellent use of vocabulary. You have added in a lot of adverbs to give your reader extra information and I like how you have used them as sentence starters. So, what had happened to your mother?
Hi Lily,
You have written well an interesting story. I don’t like white sandwiches either.
I wonder if you have overdone the adverbs – maybe, make them into adverbial phrases.
Steven Hales – Stiffkey, Norfolk, England, UK – #Team100wc
This is so good!!!!! What happened to ner mom!!??!?!
Excellent use of vocabulary. You have added in a lot of adverbs to give your reader extra information and I like how you have used them as sentence starters. So, what had happened to your mother?
Hi Lily,
You have written well an interesting story. I don’t like white sandwiches either.
I wonder if you have overdone the adverbs – maybe, make them into adverbial phrases.
Steven Hales – Stiffkey, Norfolk, England, UK – #Team100wc