Mia

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3 Responses to Mia

  1. vgutmann says:

    Some great ideas Mia. I like the way you have described feeling both happy and sad at the same time. You need to change the second paragraph so that you continue in the past tense as this is supposed to be a diary entry.

  2. Sophia says:

    I love your story, but you should look carefully at your grammar and punctuation.

  3. Leila Hijii says:

    I really like your story. You can really feel the emotion you wrote about. I like how in the beginning you talk about leaving so you really wonder about that. Nice story!

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