Walk through the past

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2 Responses to Walk through the past

  1. vgutmann says:

    Good ideas and an excellent twist at the end. Your speech is mainly well punctuated but make sure you remember the comma at the beginning/end of the speech. Good use of adjectives to describe Cardiff.

  2. Mrs.Schmidt (Team 100WC) says:

    Dear Josh,
    Thank you for taking part in this week’s 100 Word Challenge. You’ve written a very nice piece to go along with the photo prompt for this week. My 3rd grade students enjoyed learning about the story of the Titanic this year. I agree with you that it is a very emotional story. You used some great adjectives in your writing – extraordinary, fun-filled and heartbroken. They really helped me understand the story very well. I loved your title and your personal twist at the end! One suggestion that I have is to watch your punctuation. The last sentence (paragraph) was a bit of a run on and should probably have been broken up into 2 or 3 sentences instead of just one. Great job this week!
    Mrs. Schmidt (Team 100WC)
    Grade 3 Teacher
    Pennsylvania, USA

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