A lovely story, well done for using the prompt words. I like your use of ‘gentle’. Try to use more adjectives to describe the swans. What do they look like? How do they feel, other than mad?
Thank you, Harvey, for entering this week’s 100 word challenge. It can be very tricky trying to include all five words, so well done for achieving this.
You have managed to include commas and brackets but I want you to think more about your use of full stops. Most of your entry is just one sentence. Can you read through and find where you could use more full stops? This will help your writing to make more sense.
Keep up the writing!
Mrs Lucas, Team 100WC
A lovely story, well done for using the prompt words. I like your use of ‘gentle’. Try to use more adjectives to describe the swans. What do they look like? How do they feel, other than mad?
Thank you, Harvey, for entering this week’s 100 word challenge. It can be very tricky trying to include all five words, so well done for achieving this.
You have managed to include commas and brackets but I want you to think more about your use of full stops. Most of your entry is just one sentence. Can you read through and find where you could use more full stops? This will help your writing to make more sense.
Keep up the writing!
Mrs Lucas, Team 100WC