Your writing is getting much better Daniel. Well done for adding and correctly punctuating a drop in clause. You have also used some good vocabulary, especially ‘smashed’ and ‘furious’. However, some of your writing is difficult to follow, especially near the end. Read your work, or get a friend to read it, before you publish to ensure it makes sense.
Your writing is getting much better Daniel. Well done for adding and correctly punctuating a drop in clause. You have also used some good vocabulary, especially ‘smashed’ and ‘furious’. However, some of your writing is difficult to follow, especially near the end. Read your work, or get a friend to read it, before you publish to ensure it makes sense.
well done Daniel you are getting better at the 100 word challenge yay for Daniel